Dialogue Correction
- Fakhruddin Babar
- Aug 3
- 7 min read
Updated: Aug 14
This is a sample writing of a student. The corrected version given at the end.
Student's Sample Writing
Ans to Q. no.9
Mahmud: Hey Manuf! How are you?
Manuf: Oh Hi Mahmud, I'm good, what about you?
Mahmud: I'm good too.
Manuf: Its been so long since we hake meet.
Mahmud: So what. we have been with each othen on messenger.
Manuf: youn right, mobile phone has made our life so eury to comunicat with.
Mahmud: Yeah! we ean comunicat with anyone around the world through mobail phome.
Manuf: Exeetly! But there ane a tot of abuse of mobail phone too.
Mahmud: Right, Prope Mobail Phone ane making people addicted.
Manuf: Yes, and they are becoming anti-social mone and seems to be Stuetk on the phone always.
Mahmud: They also leave study and whatch phone which is not good at all.
Manuf: Nowadays, teenegans and getting worse and having the most bad affeet of it.
Mahmud: And there also having a so called the over lovens on mobail phone who they hever eheh meet.
Manuf: I know right; the's genanation getting worest wonest. we should be mone concious using noobile Phone.
Mahmud: And also ginde others about the manit arel demarits of mobile phome.
Manuf: Parents should be careful about their child, and not givững them thene own phone before 18 geans.
Mahmud: well, we had such a great conversation. But I hake to go how. I have talutions.
Manuf: Alright then, see you around, Bye.
Mahmud: See you, Bye.
Corrected Version:
Dialogue on the Uses and Abuses of Mobile Phones
Mahmud: Hey Manuf! How are you?
Manuf: Oh, hi Mahmud. I'm good, what about you?
Mahmud: I'm good too.
Manuf:
(Option 1) It's been so long since we have met.
(Option 2) It's been so long since we last met.
Mahmud:
(Option 1) So what? We've been talking with each other on Messenger.
(Option 2) I know, but at least we've been chatting on Messenger.
Manuf:
(Option 1) You're right, the mobile phone has made our life so easy.
(Option 2) You're right. Mobile phones have made it so easy to communicate.
Mahmud:
(Option 1) Yeah! We can communicate with anyone around the world through a mobile phone.
(Option 2) Yes! We can communicate with anyone in the world using mobile phones.
Manuf:
(Option 1) Exactly! But there is a lot of misuse of mobile phones, too.
(Option 2) Exactly! But there are many downsides to mobile phones, too.
Mahmud:
(Option 1) Right. Mobile phones are making people addicted.
(Option 2) Right. People say mobile phones are making people addicted.
Manuf: Yes, and they are becoming more anti-social and always seem to be stuck on their phones.
Mahmud:
(Option 1) They also neglect their studies to watch their phones, which is not good at all.
(Option 2) Also, they neglect their studies and just use their phones all the time, which isn't good.
Manuf:
(Option 1) Nowadays, teenagers are getting worse and are the most badly affected by it.
(Option 2) Teenagers today are suffering the worst effects of it.
Mahmud:
(Option 1) And they're also having so-called "online lovers" on their mobile phones whom they've never even met.
(Option 2) And they also have these so-called "online romances" through their phones with people they've never even met.
Manuf: I know, right? This generation is getting worse and worse. We should be more conscious about using mobile phones.
Mahmud: And we should also guide others about the merits and demerits of mobile phones.
Manuf: Parents should be careful with their children and not give them their own phones before they are 18 years old.
Mahmud:
(Option 1) Well, we had a great conversation, but I have to go now.
(Option 2) Well, this has been a great conversation, but I've got to run now.
Manuf: Alright then, see you around. Bye!
Mahmud: See you. Bye!
Advanced and Corrected Dialogue Options
Dialogue on the Uses and Abuses of Mobile Phones
Mahmud: Hey Manuf! How are you?
(This is natural and correct as is.)
Manuf: Oh, hi Mahmud. I'm good, what about you?
(This is natural and correct as is.)
Mahmud: I'm good too.
(This is natural and correct as is.)
Original student sentence: Its been so long since we hake meet.
Manuf (Corrected Options):
Option 1 (Standard): It's been so long since we last met.
Option 2 (Idiomatic): It feels like ages since we last saw each other.
Option 3 (Conversational): I can't believe how long it's been. It's great to see you.
Original student sentence: So what. we have been with each othen on messenger.
Mahmud (Corrected Options):
Option 1 (Standard): True, but at least we've been talking on Messenger.
Option 2 (Nuanced): That's true, but we've managed to keep in touch on Messenger, which helps.
Option 3 (Reflective): I suppose so, but it's not quite the same as meeting in person, is it?
Original student sentence: youn right, mobile phone has made our life so eury to comunicat with. Manuf (Corrected Options):
Option 1 (Standard): You're right. Mobile phones have made it so easy to communicate.
Option 2 (Advanced): Absolutely. It's undeniable how much easier mobile phones have made it to stay connected.
Option 3 (Sophisticated): I agree. The convenience of mobile phones in terms of communication is unparalleled.
Original student sentence: Yeah! we ean comunicat with anyone around the world through mobail phome.
Mahmud (Corrected Options):
Option 1 (Standard): Yeah! We can communicate with anyone around the world through a mobile phone.
Option 2 (Descriptive): Definitely. We can connect with people across the globe almost instantly.
Option 3 (Formal): For sure. They've essentially eliminated geographical barriers to communication.
Original student sentence: Exeetly! But there ane a tot of abuse of mobail phone too. Manuf (Corrected Options):
Option 1 (Standard): Exactly! But there's a lot of misuse of mobile phones, too.
Option 2 (Idiomatic): I agree, but on the flip side, the potential for misuse is enormous.
Option 3 (Advanced): Precisely. However, there's a significant downside to their prevalence.
Original student sentence: Right, Prope Mobail Phone ane making people addicted.
Mahmud (Corrected Options):
Option 1 (Standard): Right. Mobile phones are making people addicted.
Option 2 (Advanced): True. Their addictive nature is becoming a serious concern.
Option 3 (Insightful): You're right. It seems like they're fostering a culture of dependency.
Original student sentence: Yes, and they are becoming anti-social mone and seems to be Stuetk on the phone always.
Manuf (Corrected Options):
Option 1 (Standard): Yes, and they're becoming more anti-social and always seem to be stuck on their phones.
Option 2 (Descriptive): Exactly. It seems to be making people more withdrawn; they're constantly glued to their screens.
Option 3 (Sociological): I agree. It can foster a sense of isolation, with everyone perpetually engrossed in their own digital world.
Original student sentence: They also leave study and whatch phone which is not good at all.
Mahmud (Corrected Options):
Option 1 (Standard): They also neglect their studies to look at their phones, which is not good at all.
Option 2 (Advanced): It also has a detrimental effect on their studies; they often prioritize their phones over their schoolwork.
Option 3 (Formal): Furthermore, their academic performance often suffers because their attention is constantly diverted to their devices.
Original student sentence: Nowadays, teenegans and getting worse and having the most bad affeet of it.
Manuf (Corrected Options):
Option 1 (Standard): Nowadays, teenagers are the most badly affected by it.
Option 2 (Idiomatic): Teenagers, in particular, seem to be bearing the brunt of the negative effects.
Option 3 (Concerned): It's especially concerning for teenagers, who seem most susceptible to the negative impacts.
Original student sentence: And there also having a so called the over lovens on mobail phone who they hever eheh meet.
Mahmud (Corrected Options):
Option 1 (Standard): And they also have so-called "online lovers" on their phones whom they've never even met.
Option 2 (Advanced): Not to mention the rise of superficial online relationships with people they've never met in person.
Option 3 (Descriptive): And it facilitates these so-called "virtual romances," often with complete strangers.
Original student sentence: I know right; the's genanation getting worest wonest. we should be mone concious using noobile Phone.
Manuf (Corrected Options):
Option 1 (Standard): I know, right? This generation is getting worse. We should be more conscious about using mobile phones.
Option 2 (Idiomatic): You've hit the nail on the head. We all need to be more deliberate and conscious of how we use them.
Option 3 (Proactive): I completely agree. We need to promote more mindful usage of mobile phones.
Original student sentence: And also ginde others about the manit arel demarits of mobile phome. Mahmud (Corrected Options):
Option 1 (Standard): And we should also guide others about the merits and demerits of mobile phones.
Option 2 (Idiomatic): And we should make others aware of the pros and cons of mobile phone usage.
Option 3 (Advanced): We also have a responsibility to educate others about both the advantages and the pitfalls.
Original student sentence: Parents should be careful about their child, and not givững them thene own phone before 18 geans.
Manuf (Corrected Options):
Option 1 (Standard): Parents should be careful with their children and not give them their own phones before they are 18 years old.
Option 2 (Advisory): Parents also need to be more vigilant and consider delaying the age at which their children get a personal smartphone.
Option 3 (Formal): Parental guidance is crucial. Perhaps they should refrain from giving their children personal phones until they're mature enough to handle the responsibility.
Original student sentence: well, we had such a great conversation. But I hake to go how. I have talutions.
Mahmud (Corrected Options):
Option 1 (Standard): Well, we had a great conversation, but I have to go now.
Option 2 (Idiomatic): It was great catching up and discussing this, but I should probably get going.
Option 3 (Polite): Well, this has been a very insightful conversation, but I'm afraid I have to run.
Manuf: Alright then, see you around. Bye!
(This is natural and correct as is.)
Mahmud: See you. Bye!
(This is natural and correct as is.)
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